Tuesday, May 10, 2011

To Tender Mourning (Poem)

To Tender Mourning

Of no vow
do lips seek promise;
from no name,
none's spoken
after; nor from eyes light coaxed
to tender mourning.

© 2011 Maureen E. Doallas
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I offer this poem, in the Shadorma form, for the One Shot Wednesday event at One Stop Poetry, which each week invites poets to share, read, and comment on each other's work. Visit the site late Tuesday afternoon and every Wednesday for the many contributors' poems.

17 comments:

Glynn said...

I read this aloud, and "mourning" became "morning." Beautiful.

Louise Gallagher said...

The sadness in this poem is stunningly beautiful. And making sadness beautiful is hard!

Well done.

Kathleen Overby said...

The title, the title iLike. So many styles Ive never heard of. You always stretch yourself.

nance marie said...

bereft

Hannah Stephenson said...

This form makes for interesting pacing. I admire your conciseness--I find it harder to say more with less.

signed...bkm said...

the truth of a silent mourning so well expressed Maureen...bkm

repressedsoul said...

the beauty of a shadorma is what's left unsaid. Great choice of words Maureen, and a poignant and touching result.

Brian Miller said...

a beautiful sadness...may morning come on your mourning...

Beachanny said...

I love the way you are elevating the Shadorma form each time you use it. It seems ideally suited to your style and you know I love it too. This was beautiful and heart breaking. I want to reach out to you with sympathy. Thank you so much, Gay

Joe Hesch said...

I love this form, Maureen, and you have crafted a beautiful poem within its structure and constraints.

ayala said...

A beautiful sadness....

Jerry said...

Your writing always stretches me. I always read more than once. All the negative no, nor, none turn into a beautiful silent sadness...a toudhing of the heart of God.

S. Etole said...

there's a touch to this that reaches deep in my heart ...

Luke Prater said...

you pack a lot into this short form. I kept reading 'mourning' as 'morning' .. the implication is interesting. Intended?

Nice piece Maureen

hedgewitch said...

Quite a feel of the old troubadours to this, for some reason, maybe the simplicity combined with the universality, stated so well. A fine use of form, almost unseen which is hard with such a stringent one, but strongly felt.

C Rose said...

This comes from an old soul of writing, I loved it ~ Rose

Weston D Fosdeck said...

I Like it. will have to investigate this form further.