tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post2105437334438044060..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Bad Fruit (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-2524459537935961902011-11-16T19:28:21.050-05:002011-11-16T19:28:21.050-05:00this is a great read :Dthis is a great read :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-89838209942470198882011-11-16T18:18:53.054-05:002011-11-16T18:18:53.054-05:00What a fantastic poem! mazing that you can take su...What a fantastic poem! mazing that you can take such a mundane subject and make it so enthralling. :)Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-14898880267527783862011-11-16T17:31:06.848-05:002011-11-16T17:31:06.848-05:00You continue to impress me in the way you make eve...You continue to impress me in the way you make every word count, in your precision of language, and in the tension you create in the poem, holding back, holding back and yet revealing until 'snap' at the end you release and reveal the metaphor in one breath. It keeps us holding ours to read you. Excellent as always.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-285351559215781642011-11-16T17:23:00.881-05:002011-11-16T17:23:00.881-05:00Life has such a balance between pith and sweetness...Life has such a balance between pith and sweetness. As this poem, first lyrical, then as biting as harsh words before the morning sip. Very inventive play with the metaphor.Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-126523302086405952011-11-15T22:51:46.406-05:002011-11-15T22:51:46.406-05:00So beautifully you have gave us this treat... I lo...So beautifully you have gave us this treat... I loved your lines...<br /><br />"of juice on tongue as sharp as words loosed<br />before the morning's glass is raised. Not<br /><br />praised for what these wedges were, sweet<br />meat yielding pips into hands from squeeze,"<br /><br />Lovely...<br /><br /><br /><br />Shashi<br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br />http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-where-you-will-go.htmlShashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-27387861500373414242011-11-15T21:41:55.261-05:002011-11-15T21:41:55.261-05:00Wow. That's deep. I feel somewhat ashamed that...Wow. That's deep. I feel somewhat ashamed that I only see it as a piece of fruit after that introspective into what is "orange". Nice job! I once had to write a half-page description of a marshmallow for a descriptive writing class in high school. You would have gotten an A+ on that assignment I bet, LOL!Cindy Brownhttp://www.everydayunderwear.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-20960273362980286262011-11-15T20:14:14.028-05:002011-11-15T20:14:14.028-05:00Living myself in the Big Orange, this rings only t...Living myself in the Big Orange, this rings only too true. And the damage is not just due to winter cold -- which is sparse around here.<br /><br />Sour grapes, rotten apples seem cliched in our lexicon, but not sour oranges. <br /><br />Perhaps we should be quicker to pick and squeeze the sweetest things in our lives!Charles Elliott/Beautyseerhttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FB5e6DM6qPonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-84093406134022181972011-11-15T18:40:36.627-05:002011-11-15T18:40:36.627-05:00so thoughtful... nice presentation of self-worthso thoughtful... nice presentation of self-worthAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-71458116138268375882011-11-15T18:17:40.118-05:002011-11-15T18:17:40.118-05:00Where do I begin? (isn't that Love Story?)
rh...Where do I begin? (isn't that Love Story?)<br />rhythm, rhyme, and (of course!) a Message!<br />rich poem. very well done. I am impressed.tinkwelbornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14163026661564191285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81767331311058676912011-11-15T18:01:03.844-05:002011-11-15T18:01:03.844-05:00oranges so often disappoint with their promise of ...oranges so often disappoint with their promise of sweetness and yield of bitterness ...S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-15872773558584973012011-11-15T17:50:33.094-05:002011-11-15T17:50:33.094-05:00Extremely well-executed metaphor, line by line per...Extremely well-executed metaphor, line by line perfect in drawing its parallels. Descriptively it sings, as well. Fine poem.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-43797759755344820432011-11-15T16:42:12.886-05:002011-11-15T16:42:12.886-05:00the damage that happens all too naturally...what a...the damage that happens all too naturally...what a great closure maureen..would love to hear that read..much like the rhythm and so much more than just oranges..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-28735836809814980672011-11-15T15:37:19.628-05:002011-11-15T15:37:19.628-05:00well done..and the damage that happens all too nat...well done..and the damage that happens all too naturally...love it..bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-34380251171063433382011-11-15T15:24:34.305-05:002011-11-15T15:24:34.305-05:00Looking from the outside in, wonderful verse.Looking from the outside in, wonderful verse.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-82289998887167584082011-11-15T15:22:17.850-05:002011-11-15T15:22:17.850-05:00Oranges---I love them and devour them like crazy.
...Oranges---I love them and devour them like crazy.<br /><br />I like how your poem considers these little, self-contained rottennesses/ripenesses.Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-37847277828832582582011-11-15T15:21:06.837-05:002011-11-15T15:21:06.837-05:00i tried to pick out a favorite line, which is what...i tried to pick out a favorite line, which is what i like to do for the authors i read, but...this one was so appealing, line after line, I could not possibly choose only one. your words are seductive and captivating. lovely read! thank you!<br /><br />http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/11/14/the-widow/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-23238414413746518572011-11-15T15:20:30.578-05:002011-11-15T15:20:30.578-05:00so much only seen once you are through the skin......so much only seen once you are through the skin...nice evocative piece maureen...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-43030798253016048552011-11-15T13:35:01.271-05:002011-11-15T13:35:01.271-05:00This is exquisite-- I especially love:
Uncut, the...This is exquisite-- I especially love:<br /><br />Uncut, the pebbly shield<br />whose color gives it name betrays no rot<br /><br />of essence, but subject to a winter's freeze,<br />orange sours without a change of face, the taste<br /><br />of juice on tongue as sharp as words loosed<br />before the morning's glass is raised.<br /><br />I notice that I use the article "the" far more than you do. I generally think that at times it strengthens or amplifies the referent and makes the sentence more definitive in some ways. xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-73827363641212085872011-11-15T11:39:29.849-05:002011-11-15T11:39:29.849-05:00Beautiful and evocative -- thanks Maureen. Great m...Beautiful and evocative -- thanks Maureen. Great metaphor for the damage that's invisible on the outside but can be quite real, and that comes out and surprises us.Katarinahttp://sleeponthehearth.comnoreply@blogger.com