tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post2957961770697527598..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Erosion (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-12680657314319009952011-04-11T02:22:47.951-04:002011-04-11T02:22:47.951-04:00I really like this poem, the title Erosion, that e...I really like this poem, the title Erosion, that even though we forgive, things can erode a bit as words are such weapons leaving their scars.Basque-Landhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04831826411062363382noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-25289715328795315192011-04-07T13:47:10.506-04:002011-04-07T13:47:10.506-04:00There are so many phrases packing a punch, and the...There are so many phrases packing a punch, and they all come up on you unexpectedly. Wonderful.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-84151413445894838282011-04-07T05:43:30.784-04:002011-04-07T05:43:30.784-04:00Moment by moment. One hand at a time.
I like this...Moment by moment. One hand at a time.<br /><br />I like this. I like how you used <i>below the radar</i> and it reminded me of "below the belt."Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-8562121985114950762011-04-06T23:19:13.143-04:002011-04-06T23:19:13.143-04:00Powerful poem that addresses so many aspects of hu...Powerful poem that addresses so many aspects of hurt and forgiveness. I especially like that last image of working together in the mud before the damage hardens.Violet N.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16586574800230604652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-50065456144879859242011-04-06T17:53:54.797-04:002011-04-06T17:53:54.797-04:00I think you've served the forgiveness prompt w...I think you've served the forgiveness prompt well. I especially like the last phrase.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-90583830971020185862011-04-06T14:21:11.811-04:002011-04-06T14:21:11.811-04:00this was a flowing read...not once did it falter, ...this was a flowing read...not once did it falter, leading up to a wonderful conclusion...enjoyed this..cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-345363932130451792011-04-06T13:55:18.087-04:002011-04-06T13:55:18.087-04:00"The suffocating black of the storms we'v..."The suffocating black of the storms we've weathered." Always such great combinations of physical and emotional imagery, Maureen. Thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81405839736846907432011-04-06T13:20:12.839-04:002011-04-06T13:20:12.839-04:00Foregiveness is the only true blessing people can ...Foregiveness is the only true blessing people can bestow.<br /><br />Nice piece, Maureen. :)Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-7404270545848961912011-04-06T10:09:31.285-04:002011-04-06T10:09:31.285-04:00These words:
"suffocating...
exhaust...
heave...These words:<br />"suffocating...<br />exhaust...<br />heaved..."<br /><br />Thanks for this poem, Maureen.Monica Sharmanhttp://monicasharman.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55456294110868000502011-04-05T22:44:31.302-04:002011-04-05T22:44:31.302-04:00"practice watching each other recede, like th..."practice watching each other recede, like the moon" <br /><br />relationship define so well in working forgiveness, in working through messiness....very nice..bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81768589683336766312011-04-05T19:30:20.162-04:002011-04-05T19:30:20.162-04:00love the end there where you turn to mud, the mess...love the end there where you turn to mud, the messiness before the hardness...that visual drives this home very nicely.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-1026705801658331692011-04-05T18:03:41.590-04:002011-04-05T18:03:41.590-04:00Excellent writing. You know your craft!Excellent writing. You know your craft!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81994429376448356252011-04-05T16:26:09.634-04:002011-04-05T16:26:09.634-04:00There's no unsaying those clipping words, but ...There's no unsaying those clipping words, but there's no living without forgiveness either. A lovely piece Maureen, especially the final lines.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55678644583837535472011-04-05T10:54:38.972-04:002011-04-05T10:54:38.972-04:00The mandatory evacuation of words...that will real...The mandatory evacuation of words...that will really stay with me.<br /><br />Beautiful poem.Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-75504010030501493302011-04-05T09:14:35.689-04:002011-04-05T09:14:35.689-04:00I agree with everything Glynn said.
As I read it ...I agree with everything Glynn said.<br /><br />As I read it I felt myself easing into calmness, peace, tranquility, restfulness.<br /><br />Very beautiful!Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-53160039592943282662011-04-05T08:22:18.115-04:002011-04-05T08:22:18.115-04:00Words so carefully chosen for words so uncarefully...Words so carefully chosen for words so uncarefully spoken.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-69830289430459751602011-04-05T07:36:43.256-04:002011-04-05T07:36:43.256-04:00Many beautiful lines in this, Maureen (like "...Many beautiful lines in this, Maureen (like "the messiness of mud / after it's heaved") but the overall effect is one of quietness, of a heart opening and becoming vulnerable. Another beautiful poem.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.com