tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post4759454340238886601..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Lean Into the Idea (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-14346169686649348222010-08-14T15:33:37.579-04:002010-08-14T15:33:37.579-04:00Beautifully written and heartfelt poem.Beautifully written and heartfelt poem.Rachel Blackbirdsonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02246966713076881105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-73848033874962939762010-08-14T12:53:28.528-04:002010-08-14T12:53:28.528-04:00I like this so much...
"the pool forming
whe...I like this so much...<br /><br />"the pool forming<br />where deep<br />has no meaning"L.L. Barkathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13333960142447144678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-53811281331600096602010-08-11T23:12:06.417-04:002010-08-11T23:12:06.417-04:00This has such rhythm as that which beats within th...This has such rhythm as that which beats within the life-rocked heart. Thank you for these words, Maureen.insituhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15340428264219296563noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-14227063308333742472010-08-11T19:32:25.383-04:002010-08-11T19:32:25.383-04:00two
a heart knuckling
the inevitability
of the las...two<br />a heart knuckling<br />the inevitability<br />of the last dance<br />too early<br />called.<br />So very true to life...you have life to your words. Thanks for sharing xAmandahttp://buttercup600.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91120479808481434212010-08-11T19:32:22.011-04:002010-08-11T19:32:22.011-04:00Dear Maureen,
I appreciate the structure and tigh...Dear Maureen,<br /><br />I appreciate the structure and tightness of this. It reminds me of a poem I wrote after my father died that I've been meaning to get back to. "Lean in to me, and I'll learn into you," his wordless promise when I was born... As it is your poem makes me think of life and loss. Thank you. Peace,<br /><br />DianeD.M. SOLIShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13753807150268735755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91003186126729065002010-08-11T19:31:53.179-04:002010-08-11T19:31:53.179-04:00two
a heart knuckling
the inevitability
of the las...two<br />a heart knuckling<br />the inevitability<br />of the last dance<br />too early<br />called.<br />So very true to life...you have life to your words. Thanks for sharing xAmandahttp://buttercup600.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-39959147957732249112010-08-11T18:46:07.124-04:002010-08-11T18:46:07.124-04:00"last dance too early called"
there'..."last dance too early called"<br /><br />there's something there that is pulling on my heart...<br /><br />I believe you've written something that will speak to everyone exactly what God wants them to hear.HisFireFlyhttp://hisfirefly.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-88435383220545203732010-08-11T18:24:10.012-04:002010-08-11T18:24:10.012-04:00"silence surges in the space between the vowi..."silence surges in the space between the vowing and the letting go-- really love this-- it could be a first line for a new poem perhaps taking you deeper into that place we all know, and visit too frequently.<br /><br />A time of life of loss up against the richness of knowing someone and the aftermath of that person in one's life-- beautiful. xjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-36147213324776895092010-08-11T18:22:23.862-04:002010-08-11T18:22:23.862-04:00i especially liked,
"the promise
lifting
emp...i especially liked,<br /><br />"the promise<br />lifting<br />empty air"<br /><br />and<br /><br />"silence surges in the space between the vowing"Laurie A.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11835435551938917829noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-20905628319903590732010-08-11T17:29:43.508-04:002010-08-11T17:29:43.508-04:00There was a lovely rhythm in this poem..the last l...There was a lovely rhythm in this poem..the last lines just break aheart. I'm so sorry for your friend's loss.TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-42868176541399977582010-08-11T17:13:02.750-04:002010-08-11T17:13:02.750-04:00You know I know nothing about poetry, Maureen, but...You know I know nothing about poetry, Maureen, but I just love this--how you strung the words together. I don't even know if it means the same to you as it does to me, but I guess in the end it doesn't matter, because it does mean something to me. Thank you.katdishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09210738418270395622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-47722178147771289522010-08-11T14:07:47.985-04:002010-08-11T14:07:47.985-04:00Elegant elegy. Written so well and without sentime...Elegant elegy. Written so well and without sentimentality. Strong poetry beautifully built. Thank you.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-2868162710001942682010-08-11T13:48:34.725-04:002010-08-11T13:48:34.725-04:00So complex. No dross here at all. Lump. In. Throat...So complex. No dross here at all. Lump. In. Throat.Kathleen Overbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12684519598333961438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-41784669121985095862010-08-11T13:14:16.674-04:002010-08-11T13:14:16.674-04:00Thank you all for your many wonderful comments. Th...Thank you all for your many wonderful comments. The inspiration for this was a friend marking the second anniversary of her husband's death from cancer.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-54024254948342849942010-08-11T12:10:03.420-04:002010-08-11T12:10:03.420-04:00Nice triplets. There's a definite, yet hesita...Nice triplets. There's a definite, yet hesitant, cadence to this that leads one through it.Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-72537119044384513272010-08-11T12:04:20.755-04:002010-08-11T12:04:20.755-04:00I love the Title because it can pertain to life bu...I love the Title because it can pertain to life but also to an aspect of life. The poem succeeds in leaning with energy into the goal.<br /><br />Masterfully done Maureen<br />thanks for sharing this at One Shot<br /><br /><br />Love from the Moonmoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-24167954109703589272010-08-11T11:56:41.026-04:002010-08-11T11:56:41.026-04:00in the space/ between/ the vowing/ and the letting...in the space/ between/ the vowing/ and the letting go" seems to have struck a chord with many. Me, too.A. Jay Adlerhttp://sadredearth.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-31697914772821347032010-08-11T11:48:44.035-04:002010-08-11T11:48:44.035-04:00Excellent. There are so many lovely lines, but &qu...Excellent. There are so many lovely lines, but "dance too early called" really sings for me.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-73533731608633227422010-08-11T11:33:22.920-04:002010-08-11T11:33:22.920-04:00I too resonate with the whole poem, and in particu...I too resonate with the whole poem, and in particular the lines, 'silence surges in the place between the vowing and the letting go'.<br /><br />Achingly beautiful.Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-85460577632950135792010-08-11T10:56:14.052-04:002010-08-11T10:56:14.052-04:00We have crossed paths so often over this network, ...We have crossed paths so often over this network, and I have enjoyed reading your words. <br />This is so poignant. I love, "silence surges in the place between the vowing and the letting go" - just makes my heart ache a bit.<br />You are so gifted Maureen.Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14937532276250199445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-61868811298601189902010-08-11T08:49:29.645-04:002010-08-11T08:49:29.645-04:00...the last dance too early called...
loved this e......the last dance too early called...<br />loved this ending to your flowing poem..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91916022046176729662010-08-11T06:26:32.901-04:002010-08-11T06:26:32.901-04:00that was very well written, we are all picking up ...that was very well written, we are all picking up on the breathe settles, but subconsciously that is what you made me do..thanks for sharing PeteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-66334383805861630862010-08-11T02:21:29.999-04:002010-08-11T02:21:29.999-04:00hit by a mac truck
it plays in slow motion
over an...hit by a mac truck<br />it plays in slow motion<br />over and over<br />until i understand<br />this idea<br />they tell me<br />what steps must<br />be dancedAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-69282531571406874022010-08-10T23:28:58.784-04:002010-08-10T23:28:58.784-04:00I held my breathe until I read, "breath settl...I held my breathe until I read, "breath settles"...love the tension.CMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15697762495151569561noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-33148706668488456362010-08-10T22:48:27.604-04:002010-08-10T22:48:27.604-04:00excellent flow...and i seem to love the same line ...excellent flow...and i seem to love the same line and break as everyone else as this is where my breath settled as well...nice one shot!Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com