tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post5639073994469483742..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Inside Serra (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-8229847959402260782011-04-10T11:57:22.706-04:002011-04-10T11:57:22.706-04:00Love this poem, Maureen, as it takes me back to a ...Love this poem, Maureen, as it takes me back to a walk I took through this Sierra work one day a few years ago in Bilbao, hand in hand with my wife and daughters. There was an eerie power to the experience that all of us felt, but none of us could describe or express. Were we wandering aimlessly or being funnelled, as we curled our way inside those imposing curved slabs of rusted metal?<br /><br />I love the ending: <i>Not / till I look up do I get how / the dark and light work in tandem</i>.<br /><br />[my earlier try to post this comment crashed, so I am not sure if you are getting this twice; if so delete one]Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07522265816460154722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-83583278173508802242011-03-16T21:32:17.661-04:002011-03-16T21:32:17.661-04:00The poem really speaks for the beautiful piece of ...The poem really speaks for the beautiful piece of art... <br />Looking beneath the smooth exterior and discovering all those facets and layers of meaning is an art by itself... <br />I like how you wrote this from Serra's perspective.. really very impressive!Kavitahttp://kavisionz.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-41894638900801367422011-03-16T18:46:29.855-04:002011-03-16T18:46:29.855-04:00Sensuous, richly textured, penetrating--I followed...Sensuous, richly textured, penetrating--I followed each sinuous line with my body and my senses sharply attuned! Excellent poetry, as always from you! Tahnk you!Alegria Imperialnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55633376836020776892011-03-16T11:22:02.911-04:002011-03-16T11:22:02.911-04:00Nice ekphrastic pulse in this, although the poem c...Nice ekphrastic pulse in this, although the poem can stand on its own. The close is particularly effective.Cheryl Snellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00282790491003471641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-44495928122836350542011-03-16T09:04:46.620-04:002011-03-16T09:04:46.620-04:00Dear Maureen
Wow!!! Its so lovely.. I enjoyed you...Dear Maureen<br /><br />Wow!!! Its so lovely.. I enjoyed your words very much... your lines were so perfect...<br />'your massiveness moved me<br />inside your insides. I could<br /><br />have come unfurled,<br />climbed your walls curling'<br /><br />Got me thinking on so many levels...<br /><br /><br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br />http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/03/whispers-love-and-insignificance.html<br />Connect me at Twitter @VerseEveryDayShashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-1069445611459571842011-03-16T05:50:07.941-04:002011-03-16T05:50:07.941-04:00I feel the power of this gorgeous piece of art thr...I feel the power of this gorgeous piece of art through you and your words, Maureen. My favorite line: <i>I could / have come unfurled . . .</i>, the poet's response deep within herself, within this play with space. Very nice.Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-45555455083403727622011-03-16T02:00:50.856-04:002011-03-16T02:00:50.856-04:00"Your path takes me deep. Not
till I look up..."Your path takes me deep. Not<br /><br />till I look up do I get how<br />the dark and the light work in tandem."<br /><br />I like the tension in this (light vs dark), Maureen, how it wraps around Serra (love him!), the tilting away to understand, grasp, and the aha! moment. Well done!!*https://www.blogger.com/profile/06484208765656281917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-45597370992504289262011-03-16T01:04:47.511-04:002011-03-16T01:04:47.511-04:00Ooh la la!
This is moving. right into the heart.
...Ooh la la!<br /><br />This is moving. right into the heart.<br /><br />Oooh la la!Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-4781832348729466662011-03-16T00:11:28.503-04:002011-03-16T00:11:28.503-04:00You have really 'got into' this work. I lo...You have really 'got into' this work. I love the way you play with 'rust' - "alchemical mixing / of oxygen with the elemental // leaving you earthy and russeted....corrodes / itself eating browned orange to amber..." <br /><br />A great read, Maureen!Violet N.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16586574800230604652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-25095175684320106292011-03-15T19:49:17.977-04:002011-03-15T19:49:17.977-04:00More polished and curved than the sculpture it des...More polished and curved than the sculpture it describes, these couplets create their own space and balance. Lovely work.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-16368925351565432772011-03-15T19:35:32.917-04:002011-03-15T19:35:32.917-04:00Excellent. I followed the metaphor into and throu...Excellent. I followed the metaphor into and through your heart. We too have one of his sculpture in Fort Worth quite like this outside the new Modern. It reshapes your mindset before entering an extraordinary innerspace inside the museum. I love the building more than its collections and go there often.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-33753779610572641132011-03-15T18:53:50.065-04:002011-03-15T18:53:50.065-04:00Thank you for helping me see another side of Serra...Thank you for helping me see another side of Serra. Well written.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-12140072961398495342011-03-15T18:16:12.867-04:002011-03-15T18:16:12.867-04:00poem has a coming home feeling to it, away from th...poem has a coming home feeling to it, away from the hustle and bustle of the city to wrap ourself aroung a serra, that feels like it's a part of you. Excellent writing Maureen.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-66601509794537695842011-03-15T17:54:46.305-04:002011-03-15T17:54:46.305-04:00I love the Serra piece in question, and am always ...I love the Serra piece in question, and am always interested in reading how poets talk about art. That said, this isn't quite working for me. It feels too removed, as if you are writing from outside the piece rather than within it. Keep at it though, you've got a good idea here.Seann McCollumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01336078093080875959noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-39198357345989476212011-03-15T17:43:14.889-04:002011-03-15T17:43:14.889-04:00a very sensual response to the work...i like that....a very sensual response to the work...i like that...the feeling in the gut as one looks at it...experiences it...nice one shot.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-17378373343700914242011-03-15T17:32:56.485-04:002011-03-15T17:32:56.485-04:00wow - impressive artwork and a beautiful capture o...wow - impressive artwork and a beautiful capture of it with your words maureen - esp. like the lines..<br />meant to make me weigh<br />the arcs of meaning you achieveClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-16423043489645907142011-03-15T14:42:28.783-04:002011-03-15T14:42:28.783-04:00Makes me feel what it might be like to be the beat...Makes me feel what it might be like to be the beating <br />creature inside a conch shell. What is it about spirals, rust, light? Can we put this one in Neruda's Memoirs- Please ? I really like it. Here's the click. iLike. :)Kathleen Overbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12684519598333961438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-19679706056880464942011-03-15T09:23:12.436-04:002011-03-15T09:23:12.436-04:00Your "I see you for what you are" togeth...Your "I see you for what you are" together with your awareness of your evolving presence in conjunction with the Serra sculpture illustrates the rather difficult quotation you have selected. <br /><br />I saw a collection of site-specific drawings by Serra in a narrow rectangular gallery with a towering ceiling. They were simply very large black squares hanging high up above eye level. The sense of power was extraordinary.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-53199649555943395022011-03-15T08:29:29.063-04:002011-03-15T08:29:29.063-04:00you have moved me right into the heart of this ......you have moved me right into the heart of this ...S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-32198855760634834592011-03-15T07:05:01.276-04:002011-03-15T07:05:01.276-04:00Lovely, Maureen.
We have a Serra sculpture in do...Lovely, Maureen. <br /><br />We have a Serra sculpture in downtown St. Louis that for years was the object of controversy, ridicule and passionate defense -- actually, a war between the two newspapers we had at the time. It sat by itself, inhabited largely by the homeless, until it because the western anchor of a sculpture park. And then it found its place.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.com