tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post5794300794797952583..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Ana's Story (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-17515813966485723622011-12-01T13:09:53.129-05:002011-12-01T13:09:53.129-05:00I thank you all for reading and commenting.
This ...I thank you all for reading and commenting.<br /><br />This is a poem I sent out and for which I received a rejection; perhaps it was considered too long, though no reason was given. I'm pleased to know it works for all of you.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91296162670155019412011-12-01T12:56:31.973-05:002011-12-01T12:56:31.973-05:00Wow Maureen, bravo! Ambitious and gripping write h...Wow Maureen, bravo! Ambitious and gripping write here, and it engages throughout -- well written...rob kistnerhttp://image-verse.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81492215590878085822011-12-01T01:13:32.815-05:002011-12-01T01:13:32.815-05:00wow, what a story...wow, what a story...Cathy Feasterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01302068829418562420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-72153468201505937752011-11-30T19:14:26.873-05:002011-11-30T19:14:26.873-05:00These are some of the lines I really enjoyed:
&qu...These are some of the lines I really enjoyed:<br /><br />"unscripted, not carved<br />in soft lime<br />stone visage,"<br /><br />"wildflowers<br />stuck between her legs,<br />bare arms spread"<br /><br />"Death makes art<br />of Ana's demise,<br />rests in tracks<br />in brown wounds,<br />in siluetas washed out<br />with red tide to sea."<br /><br />Beautiful, soulful, painful writing.<br /><br /><br />Based on your topics, I think you might really like these of mine:<br /><br />http://iamthat-shawna.blogspot.com/2011/11/peekaboo.html<br /><br />http://iamthat-shawna.blogspot.com/2011/11/winter-in-havana.html✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-18670878881633647512011-11-30T05:34:01.522-05:002011-11-30T05:34:01.522-05:00The imagery of the ficus, the wildflowers and the ...The imagery of the ficus, the wildflowers and the other colors and shapes you include in your powerful poem really temper the weight and pain of this story with beauty. It is a terrifying subject, and as Hedge says, you treat it with tenderness. Fine work.Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-46942697875322491232011-11-30T00:45:39.860-05:002011-11-30T00:45:39.860-05:00An artist's death her final work of art? carri...An artist's death her final work of art? carries performance art further than most of us are likely to want to go. But you made an fascinating and evocative poem out of this puzzling story. <br /><br />Should we say, don't try this at home?Charles Elliott/Beautyseerhttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4Mh0hr3bPWUnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-13986291290451816852011-11-29T22:29:34.332-05:002011-11-29T22:29:34.332-05:00The photograph only makes the poem ache more as it...The photograph only makes the poem ache more as it hits the senses and one begins to comprehend that this is testimony, the testimony that convinces and convicts: an intense, riveting and I'm sure, hard-won poem of witness, Maureen. xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-28634586286249278012011-11-29T18:30:33.227-05:002011-11-29T18:30:33.227-05:00Intense and amazing. Thank you for the note !Intense and amazing. Thank you for the note !ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-20273006823133761812011-11-29T18:25:58.722-05:002011-11-29T18:25:58.722-05:00This is brilliantly, vividly written. I was not fa...This is brilliantly, vividly written. I was not familiar with her story before but now I won't forget it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-9990862925117476002011-11-29T16:40:32.807-05:002011-11-29T16:40:32.807-05:00AMAZING write... so haunting and powerful... that ...AMAZING write... so haunting and powerful... that poor soul..Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03359959975341890512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-11134217982980156612011-11-29T16:27:17.753-05:002011-11-29T16:27:17.753-05:00Wow. Just...wow.Wow. Just...wow.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-50111507406687911672011-11-29T16:13:22.438-05:002011-11-29T16:13:22.438-05:00oh god...love how you captured the mystery... inte...oh god...love how you captured the mystery... intense and vivid work.. never heard about her..think i need to read her story..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-59250238141001150362011-11-29T15:41:28.659-05:002011-11-29T15:41:28.659-05:00This is a harrowing tale--but a riveting poem--bea...This is a harrowing tale--but a riveting poem--beautifully done!Audrey Howitt aka Divaloungerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06854425983822589062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-27821937816637026862011-11-29T15:34:47.446-05:002011-11-29T15:34:47.446-05:00Riveting ... and sorrow-filled.Riveting ... and sorrow-filled.S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-51082592161052743432011-11-29T15:34:18.120-05:002011-11-29T15:34:18.120-05:00It's as though you sculpt her with your words....It's as though you sculpt her with your words. Each line curves with color, her figure or her outline or her heritage or her art. There is texture, fluidity, movement, style and brilliance in this poem. Surely it must enhance her work which I don't even know but now long to meet. Thank you!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-44419873361583767532011-11-29T15:04:27.205-05:002011-11-29T15:04:27.205-05:00goodness maureen...intense and vivid...and a harro...goodness maureen...intense and vivid...and a harrowing tale...can not imagine her flight honestly...i dream of falling at times...even though i have jumped off 300 ft cliffs...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-236846047061863552011-11-29T13:24:34.771-05:002011-11-29T13:24:34.771-05:00Fascinating subject for a poem, and executed with ...Fascinating subject for a poem, and executed with tenderness and skill. They say part of the fear of heights is feeling an overwhelming sense of already falling, or even of feeling compelled to fall. I have it in a minor way, and I can say, that would be the last way I'd chose to die, but who knows. Part of the fascination in this poem is that it asks more questions than can be answered.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-82339280437753766022011-11-29T10:03:37.830-05:002011-11-29T10:03:37.830-05:00I hadn't heard of her before, and am thankful ...I hadn't heard of her before, and am thankful for my visit here this morning. Her work, though strikingly beautiful, saddens me by it's almost prophetic quality. Your poem expresses it perfectly, I think... it's very courages of you to explore this, Maureen<br />.Valerie Kamikubohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12864824409136614469noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-22485440201371808292011-11-29T08:28:23.611-05:002011-11-29T08:28:23.611-05:00I had to consciously breathe as I read this -- ver...I had to consciously breathe as I read this -- very powerful and disturbing.Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-65883777839568307102011-11-29T08:13:19.787-05:002011-11-29T08:13:19.787-05:00Wow. Upsetting. But it's important to write ab...Wow. Upsetting. But it's important to write about these things when we are compelled to, as you are.Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-26343929814512416682011-11-29T06:56:22.276-05:002011-11-29T06:56:22.276-05:00Powerful stuff, Maureen. Incredibly evocative. I a...Powerful stuff, Maureen. Incredibly evocative. I am disturbedNancie Mills Pipgrashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02387546084731212772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-22934638638361787792011-11-29T06:48:04.841-05:002011-11-29T06:48:04.841-05:00It's a disturbing story - but likely the perfe...It's a disturbing story - but likely the perfect poem for it.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.com