tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post670674530835931307..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Barely Head and Shoulders Above Water (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-12837428285752717062011-12-13T21:54:32.450-05:002011-12-13T21:54:32.450-05:00nicely done....I really like the short stanzas...t...nicely done....I really like the short stanzas...thanks for sharingWayne Pitchkohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-59073237952776635102011-12-13T21:52:12.184-05:002011-12-13T21:52:12.184-05:00this is an excellent piece! i like your style...le...this is an excellent piece! i like your style...learning from you. thanks for sharing...<br /><br />http://preciousnotesmundanethoughts.blogspot.com/2011/12/horizon.htmlJeannette,https://www.blogger.com/profile/05458779737807500942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-35727392275925745952011-12-12T14:21:53.295-05:002011-12-12T14:21:53.295-05:00So much said without a word wasted/misplaced.So much said without a word wasted/misplaced.Doctor FTSEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10052101566471519778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-56729377462577532292011-12-12T12:51:53.059-05:002011-12-12T12:51:53.059-05:00I'm with Semaphore....I liked the small lines ...I'm with Semaphore....I liked the small lines and having to scroll down to read them (a "treading water" sensation).Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91237113552367241732011-12-12T12:33:13.081-05:002011-12-12T12:33:13.081-05:00Accurate description of relationship reality ... I...Accurate description of relationship reality ... I enjoyed it!!!Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-15585452278137430822011-12-12T09:06:28.486-05:002011-12-12T09:06:28.486-05:00Angst on the beach - finely craftedAngst on the beach - finely craftedIsabel Doylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17974989548030799086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-60474107374855252992011-12-12T06:47:21.577-05:002011-12-12T06:47:21.577-05:00You have a gift for this.You have a gift for this.Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494219959077922220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-89730543707253862182011-12-11T18:48:01.807-05:002011-12-11T18:48:01.807-05:00You do this so well ... always.You do this so well ... always.S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-61337602314283729262011-12-11T16:15:39.561-05:002011-12-11T16:15:39.561-05:00I loved the way you have structured this brilliant...I loved the way you have structured this brilliant poem.Cait O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04569760764766505179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-7976053565735620022011-12-11T16:11:41.090-05:002011-12-11T16:11:41.090-05:00The short staccato stanzas are very effective here...The short staccato stanzas are very effective here. Good write.Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-11840849532448204782011-12-11T16:10:53.828-05:002011-12-11T16:10:53.828-05:00At least he's trying to see it her way.At least he's trying to see it her way.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-14963294041559390012011-12-11T15:39:08.301-05:002011-12-11T15:39:08.301-05:00excellent
the two are not "in the same boat&q...excellent<br />the two are not "in the same boat"<br />as life often is they aren't pulling the same directionladysknighthttp://ladysknight.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-1138673002202905622011-12-11T14:45:08.736-05:002011-12-11T14:45:08.736-05:00struck me as a plaintive yet engaging piece, with ...struck me as a plaintive yet engaging piece, with a spirit of endearing fidelity... I was drawn in...robkistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08166835029205143266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-78966794840638745092011-12-11T13:27:42.327-05:002011-12-11T13:27:42.327-05:00I'm in … but you don't find me, barely hea...I'm in … but you don't find me, barely head and shoulders above water. Some relationships are like that.Grandmother Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18169464484379536529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-86152662937655273232011-12-11T13:24:17.493-05:002011-12-11T13:24:17.493-05:00'm in,
still counting
on you
not to leave
me...'m in,<br />still counting<br /><br />on you<br />not to leave<br /><br />me unmoored<br />nor lashed<br /><br />to the invisible<br />mast<br /><br />you used<br />to anchor us<br /><br />in the undertow<br /><br />The compressed anguish in this poem is palpable, Maureen. I hadn't yet seen the prompt-- exquisite poem. xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55638227226266390882011-12-11T13:07:08.111-05:002011-12-11T13:07:08.111-05:00Whoa. This is stunningly see through. You have a g...Whoa. This is stunningly see through. You have a genius for structuring poems so there is no riff raff.Kathleen Overbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12684519598333961438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-11912583435951388722011-12-11T13:05:19.112-05:002011-12-11T13:05:19.112-05:00nice concept. :)nice concept. :)Nehahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12895336357128654041noreply@blogger.com