tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post6911974468820297853..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: How Everything Turns (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-26810256322447554862011-10-15T06:34:43.018-04:002011-10-15T06:34:43.018-04:00These are fine, evocative images of turning away, ...These are fine, evocative images of turning away, Maureen. I was especially struck by the messenger turning away after delivering the message, not knowing the impact. It's haunting!Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-77453156527902810192011-10-12T23:57:14.586-04:002011-10-12T23:57:14.586-04:00I really love the autumnal feel of this, and the g...I really love the autumnal feel of this, and the ghazal quality (wasn't sure if you meant it to be a ghazal) but there was a thread that ran through it, that tied each couplet together and yet each one at the same time changed. Spare, minimal, concise imagery. Great!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-41047043311885190452011-10-12T20:40:18.179-04:002011-10-12T20:40:18.179-04:00Really nice..... and thoughtful. I don't lik...Really nice..... and thoughtful. I don't like that unmistakeable knock on the door...... Really enjoyed listening to you read this poem!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-13802241208980726072011-10-12T19:55:12.767-04:002011-10-12T19:55:12.767-04:00Maureen, it made my soul happy to hear your read y...Maureen, it made my soul happy to hear your read your beautiful poem. My heart much richer having heard it. You have a beautiful, poetic voice, friend to match your lyrical words.Bonnie Grayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10331275947237285245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-30906185471445409262011-10-12T19:06:21.038-04:002011-10-12T19:06:21.038-04:003 Wows here. love this poem.
fall's striptea...3 Wows here. love this poem.<br /><br />fall's striptease...this is a tease. love it.<br /><br />The 'Turn' to away...<br />so evoking, the empty nest with the single ruffled feather...Loss.<br />the letter...Loss<br /><br />evoking sentiment...saddness.<br />it moves me...your poem has affected me. good job.tinkwelbornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14163026661564191285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-62629259471541839162011-10-12T16:33:23.832-04:002011-10-12T16:33:23.832-04:00so touching and so beautiful a good by with a clos...so touching and so beautiful a good by with a closed hand wonderful image<br />http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/11/the-day-of-the-dead/#comment-1682Ann LeFlorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09421100825301270608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-25199635217274442862011-10-12T08:39:35.566-04:002011-10-12T08:39:35.566-04:00Touching and beautiful !Touching and beautiful !ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-42597065155173313772011-10-12T01:34:18.909-04:002011-10-12T01:34:18.909-04:00so beautifully written... rich expression and sadn...so beautifully written... rich expression and sadness within these examples.Patriciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00991524097486901864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-31073087524096220482011-10-12T00:39:38.484-04:002011-10-12T00:39:38.484-04:00A hand curled at it's own goodbye...love that ...A hand curled at it's own goodbye...love that image..great work Maureen...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91692318154119043422011-10-11T21:26:33.423-04:002011-10-11T21:26:33.423-04:00Working from the outer world to the inner, each ex...Working from the outer world to the inner, each example rings true and a little closer to home, till the final turning away, shadowed, becomes clear. Fine, spare, dignified, yet filled with an all too human pain.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81386058371902025242011-10-11T21:20:09.085-04:002011-10-11T21:20:09.085-04:00"Everything turns away": such sad words...."Everything turns away": such sad words. A melancholy, beautiful poem Maureen.Ann Grenierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13501522748426995035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-59464703536869580962011-10-11T20:05:23.001-04:002011-10-11T20:05:23.001-04:00Love the use of the falls striptease, truly touchi...Love the use of the falls striptease, truly touching write.Pat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-19732553412745125562011-10-11T20:04:38.782-04:002011-10-11T20:04:38.782-04:00I almost hear echos of Rilke here, Maureen, in mov...I almost hear echos of Rilke here, Maureen, in moving from statement to statement via particulars, i.e. Everything Turns Away makes me think of the poem I just worked with from the Rilke blog about the things that leave us-- and how I felt I needed to counter it. I love the notion of autumn's striptease and again the form you're working in works beautifully. Thanks for your very kind words on my effort for today. xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-50528695910529356282011-10-11T19:18:18.507-04:002011-10-11T19:18:18.507-04:00a melancholy essence of separation, of loss -- mov...a melancholy essence of separation, of loss -- moving write Maureen...robkistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08166835029205143266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-92035669217738778722011-10-11T18:46:57.415-04:002011-10-11T18:46:57.415-04:00def stirring and a felt sadness as well...maybe go...def stirring and a felt sadness as well...maybe goodbyes do that to me...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-21559671173868071102011-10-11T17:40:57.010-04:002011-10-11T17:40:57.010-04:00Beautiful & sad poem..very poignant...I felt t...Beautiful & sad poem..very poignant...I felt touched..Louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18216734722467789412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-30955594968639906602011-10-11T17:10:15.883-04:002011-10-11T17:10:15.883-04:00Thank you, Timoteo. The extra "in" is no...Thank you, Timoteo. The extra "in" is now out. (Fortunately, I didn't say it twice in the audio.)Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-24822259363645006512011-10-11T16:41:43.583-04:002011-10-11T16:41:43.583-04:00Truly touching.
(P.S. There is an extra "in&q...Truly touching.<br />(P.S. There is an extra "in" in the last line.)Timoteohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08351410966396854582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-56298325765566852792011-10-11T14:06:08.853-04:002011-10-11T14:06:08.853-04:00left wondering about that last line ...left wondering about that last line ...S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-28703242770773041222011-10-11T10:50:43.935-04:002011-10-11T10:50:43.935-04:00Lovely, sad, poignant - and you have a beautiful r...Lovely, sad, poignant - and you have a beautiful reading voice, Maureen.Beverly Diehlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00392288953821757887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-77231789047326858652011-10-11T10:49:30.247-04:002011-10-11T10:49:30.247-04:00Beautiful Maureen.
Stirred here.
Left praying that...Beautiful Maureen.<br />Stirred here.<br />Left praying that I turn toward...HisFireFlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846956916583286916noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-23030653265818958622011-10-11T09:03:12.797-04:002011-10-11T09:03:12.797-04:00I love each of the examples---surprising and inter...I love each of the examples---surprising and interesting choices.<br /><br />I like the narrative that kind of develops from "the messenger" onward....how we turn toward and away from the people mentioned.Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-9329806460108079942011-10-11T07:08:00.872-04:002011-10-11T07:08:00.872-04:00Lovely poem - and that last line - "a hand c...Lovely poem - and that last line - "a hand curled in on its own goodbye" - beautiful.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.com