tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post3634933395796861289..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Open-Armed, Gathering Sky (Pantoum)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-21783227510172900912013-03-11T09:44:40.116-04:002013-03-11T09:44:40.116-04:00Oh, how I love these lines:
"...old women ro...Oh, how I love these lines:<br /><br />"...old women rock away the hours, their legs thin<br />stems bent, their clusters of flaming red spires their love's charms:<br />lockets of hair their keepsakes of time."<br /><br />Beautiful.Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08263995875732832349noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-34633171812806467322013-03-09T22:42:20.069-05:002013-03-09T22:42:20.069-05:00Envisioning this scene.Envisioning this scene.S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-7598617120382682582013-03-09T22:21:12.005-05:002013-03-09T22:21:12.005-05:00I love the image you convey the rocking of old wom...I love the image you convey the rocking of old women, the stiff hands and thin legs from disuse - lockets of hair that hold life's memory...bikmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-16871719445002064862013-03-09T13:36:31.567-05:002013-03-09T13:36:31.567-05:00I love the folding repetition and your freedom to ...I love the folding repetition and your freedom to change things in a contemporary pantoum. I love the diminishing line length in that last stanza!Kathleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06559881249054540947noreply@blogger.com