tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post3797339030296045311..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Burn Out (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-22186782032592755612010-10-20T19:41:54.892-04:002010-10-20T19:41:54.892-04:00you write with such economy of words without sacri...you write with such economy of words without sacrificing the vivid imagery... fantastic write!Helena Malheurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12306591221090287590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55291715685595321502010-10-20T14:52:57.997-04:002010-10-20T14:52:57.997-04:00Loved both the style and imagery. I could identify...Loved both the style and imagery. I could identify with both. The flow of thought style makes for a fresh read even a few times in a row. There is a solid depth to your poem. Glad I checked out your 1SW post; enjoyable read.<br /><br />crbCaribbean Foolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16211032750843178534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-87169090587865251312010-10-20T14:23:30.799-04:002010-10-20T14:23:30.799-04:00..against the too-high
too-fast
climb...so poignan.....against the too-high<br />too-fast<br />climb...so poignant a description for burn out<br />also like how you started..like chatting to yourself - and then it's getting more and more intense with the too high/too fast crescendo<br />wow!Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-90848835908756184262010-10-20T12:43:19.214-04:002010-10-20T12:43:19.214-04:00wonderful writing. my muse is dragging her heels ...wonderful writing. my muse is dragging her heels lately.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-62923786462564656992010-10-20T11:40:36.398-04:002010-10-20T11:40:36.398-04:00I dug the phrase 'nook of ash' - a great d...I dug the phrase 'nook of ash' - a great descriptive! Nice One Shot, Maureen!Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-49719321086839793572010-10-20T11:34:49.495-04:002010-10-20T11:34:49.495-04:00Wow. I love all of it, but especially the last pa...Wow. I love all of it, but especially the last part:<br /><br />the too-high<br />too-fast<br />climb<br /><br />Nice One Shot!Ben Langhinrichshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16077213274836551992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-20101346226944813022010-10-20T09:17:03.024-04:002010-10-20T09:17:03.024-04:00Great images. The whole thing flows, racing throug...Great images. The whole thing flows, racing through--nice word choice, interesting structure.Chris G.http://cianphelan.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-5499858182117323302010-10-20T09:12:46.935-04:002010-10-20T09:12:46.935-04:00Well written...it's really funny how the mind ...Well written...it's really funny how the mind works up a challenge...nice way you went about the intro.<br /><br />Cheers!Emmanuel Ibokhttp://www.lordemmanuel.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81156091358850302962010-10-20T07:36:40.371-04:002010-10-20T07:36:40.371-04:00Very beautiful... I liked the last lines .. thanks...Very beautiful... I liked the last lines .. thanks for sharing...<br /><br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br />Twitter: @VerseEveryDay<br />Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/Shashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-69054390066964141562010-10-20T06:54:26.991-04:002010-10-20T06:54:26.991-04:00this was a wonderful write...it made me think of t...this was a wonderful write...it made me think of the electricity that circuits our mind..its charges that control the way we think...its surges and sparks...and then sometimes the switch has been turned off!!! cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-21870615431569273592010-10-20T05:58:30.688-04:002010-10-20T05:58:30.688-04:00What an intriguing blend of words, so quick-paced,...What an intriguing blend of words, so quick-paced, too. I found myself wanting to read this several times to unravel the layers of what in might mean -- to me.Bradley J. Moorehttp://www.shrinkingthecamel.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-5805874326717445612010-10-20T04:51:34.043-04:002010-10-20T04:51:34.043-04:00'sentenced
to map
the terrain
of the broken
w...'sentenced<br />to map<br />the terrain<br />of the broken <br />warp and weft'<br /><br />Oooh I really like that, nice writing! :-)Susannahhttp://outofmyocean.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-41081777923950901422010-10-20T03:13:33.596-04:002010-10-20T03:13:33.596-04:00"The phoenix rising from the nook of ash"..."The phoenix rising from the nook of ash" -- masterfully writ.<br /><br />Loved the movement of this poem, its bump-down grace, how the eye follows vertically, and the abrupt end. (I burn out often, most recently, this afternoon...)*https://www.blogger.com/profile/06484208765656281917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-43691229541174385852010-10-20T02:59:40.046-04:002010-10-20T02:59:40.046-04:00lovely flow to this pulls you ever deeper into the...lovely flow to this pulls you ever deeper into the weave of the wordsthe wid0whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11072263329352015415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-46557101767539577642010-10-20T00:17:20.783-04:002010-10-20T00:17:20.783-04:00I used up a months worth of adrenalin just now.I used up a months worth of adrenalin just now.Kathleen Overbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12684519598333961438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-78572674136132905312010-10-19T22:40:04.117-04:002010-10-19T22:40:04.117-04:00I found myself reading it again, and again. The im...I found myself reading it again, and again. The images are amazing, and just right, when one gets ones mind around them and remembers the title too. Loved the way the poem rose and fell... <br /><br />"mind's night light" is awesome, and the whole "sentenced...loosed" stanza too. Brilliant really.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-20893520840809905882010-10-19T22:08:52.120-04:002010-10-19T22:08:52.120-04:00"scouting distance to go the phoenix"
t..."scouting distance to go the phoenix"<br /> that is the line that grabbed me - fits the subject so nicely...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-23003843546644812782010-10-19T21:19:02.938-04:002010-10-19T21:19:02.938-04:00Very well written.
Great poetry....GVery well written.<br />Great poetry....GG-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-24748611295053897622010-10-19T21:03:35.362-04:002010-10-19T21:03:35.362-04:00Oh my goodness. I don't know how poets can do ...Oh my goodness. I don't know how poets can do this type of thing. Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-39342631384581986532010-10-19T20:00:20.441-04:002010-10-19T20:00:20.441-04:00The last stanza is sublime...xoThe last stanza is sublime...xoShellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15057420883043757798noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-79992726818064424032010-10-19T18:16:35.550-04:002010-10-19T18:16:35.550-04:00Waiting for the stall...
there was so much in thi...Waiting for the stall...<br /><br />there was so much in this piece that I want to soak in each aspect - then I get full circle to burn out<br /><br />Thanks for sharing maureen always a One Shot prize<br /><br />moonie smilesmoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-71338412489342122792010-10-19T17:50:20.374-04:002010-10-19T17:50:20.374-04:00I always enjoy the short strikes of words, they hi...I always enjoy the short strikes of words, they hit the right chords and bring life to the imagery within the dots.that was too good! :)Desert Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17370899545012572162noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-90385685211335611972010-10-19T17:40:12.662-04:002010-10-19T17:40:12.662-04:00Absolutely amazing Maureen, I love the structure o...Absolutely amazing Maureen, I love the structure of this. My perception sees that we can push ourselves sometimes too much and it can overwhelm thoughts and create more a barrier than a gateway...tiring. ~Fantastic writing! ~April :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-87903983190017753652010-10-19T17:32:06.801-04:002010-10-19T17:32:06.801-04:00Intriguing...are loose connections anything like h...Intriguing...are loose connections anything like having a screw loose?<br />(I can resonate with that!)Timoteohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08351410966396854582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-37835135452166604842010-10-19T17:32:00.633-04:002010-10-19T17:32:00.633-04:00Very nice rhythm, it flows with a pace to it.Very nice rhythm, it flows with a pace to it.tuberiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03039748415896465852noreply@blogger.com