tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post5668360744786245533..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Shooting Stars (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-34231397783543766382011-02-11T21:32:33.061-05:002011-02-11T21:32:33.061-05:00Wonderful poem. And such the perfect image to acco...Wonderful poem. And such the perfect image to accompany it.Sethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05870075379758015838noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-21807378397217387442011-02-08T09:02:53.875-05:002011-02-08T09:02:53.875-05:00Dawn, thank you letting me know. So pleased you st...Dawn, thank you letting me know. So pleased you stopped by and read the poem.<br /><br />Terresa, Ruth, Glynn, bkm, Ami, Brian, Louise, Susan, Gay, Claudia, Jen, Melissa, Adam, Padmavani, Nancy, Hedgewitch: Thank you all for reading and commenting. I appreciate all the feedback.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-14754893799027390542011-02-08T08:35:28.962-05:002011-02-08T08:35:28.962-05:00By the way, that "Anonymous" comment was...By the way, that "Anonymous" comment was me.Dawn Potterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07500960150846895633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-35727596523950160642011-02-08T01:47:58.011-05:002011-02-08T01:47:58.011-05:00Beautiful poem and picture, I feel the blue mood f...Beautiful poem and picture, I feel the blue mood filling the spaces...*https://www.blogger.com/profile/06484208765656281917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-66723390598290445402011-02-07T12:25:01.809-05:002011-02-07T12:25:01.809-05:00I like the first line very much, the way it draws ...I like the first line very much, the way it draws the reader into the poem at hand but also implies an unarticulated history.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-86032223853222262632011-02-07T07:52:48.215-05:002011-02-07T07:52:48.215-05:00I love that opening line.
There is quite a swing ...I love that opening line.<br /><br />There is quite a swing in this poem; I can feel the range of emotions, inhabited like a house. Very nicely done.Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14204074161539605133noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55329969969191361852011-02-06T21:58:09.691-05:002011-02-06T21:58:09.691-05:00I just finished reading Neruda's Memoirs today...I just finished reading Neruda's Memoirs today - and this is like a short reprise. Good poem, Maureen, as you count those shooting stars.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-55721632713908113632011-02-06T21:13:14.226-05:002011-02-06T21:13:14.226-05:00the blue moods...set the mood and setting for the ...the blue moods...set the mood and setting for the rest of the piece...nice dancing of words here...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-73040024127768208422011-02-06T18:14:23.017-05:002011-02-06T18:14:23.017-05:00terrific take on this prompt, Maureen!terrific take on this prompt, Maureen!Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-2606381975616932962011-02-06T16:33:07.677-05:002011-02-06T16:33:07.677-05:00great opening lines....esp with the mood coming af...great opening lines....esp with the mood coming after the consumption...hope you dont have to count too many stars. smiles.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-14543876283128078042011-02-06T15:21:20.694-05:002011-02-06T15:21:20.694-05:00blue moods filling spaces
It is beautiful -- the ...blue moods filling spaces<br /><br />It is beautiful -- the dance of words and shooting stars falling.<br /><br />Lovely.Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-25226587456002172452011-02-06T14:38:10.461-05:002011-02-06T14:38:10.461-05:00let the dance begin ....let the dance begin ....S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-61665328021516521692011-02-06T14:20:02.337-05:002011-02-06T14:20:02.337-05:00Oh I read this as a woman's blues. You and I a...Oh I read this as a woman's blues. You and I are done...take the sheets and take the chair. The dance floors waiting and I'm making wishes for something more. Great piece. Subtle yet edgy. Thanks. GayBeachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-54126479318883973082011-02-06T13:52:44.844-05:002011-02-06T13:52:44.844-05:00oh i like the waiting dancefloor and the shooting ...oh i like the waiting dancefloor and the shooting star counting...Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-28243419366278807982011-02-06T13:02:27.966-05:002011-02-06T13:02:27.966-05:00This is beautiful, M-- wistfulness beautifully evo...This is beautiful, M-- wistfulness beautifully evoked, idea of moving the furniture out to dance-- tres fabulous. It reminds me of our Bellevue Grange here up against the foothills that's sometimes leased out for weddings...xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-69378058690317344042011-02-06T12:57:17.877-05:002011-02-06T12:57:17.877-05:00Funny, I always call them dance floors when the wa...Funny, I always call them dance floors when the walls (of the old granaries) fall down.<br /><br />Yes, 'the temperature's been taken' is a nice line. And 'Blue moods filling spaces' can be hard. It does feel as if the air's all gone, doesn't it? That the space which seems wide open, is full up.Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13806935008233779017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-63349278224674459702011-02-06T12:47:30.096-05:002011-02-06T12:47:30.096-05:00The line breaks on "look" and "remo...The line breaks on "look" and "removed" add great emphasis to what struck me as a blue mood of dilapidation, yet one with hope springing from the notion of an awaiting dance floor—questioning remains while still counting stars. Wonderful writing. (Agree with hedgewith on the temperature line).dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-49731633527577280712011-02-06T12:46:38.804-05:002011-02-06T12:46:38.804-05:00i lost count
the stars too numerous
my eyes close...i lost count <br />the stars too numerous<br />my eyes closed by a sweet waltz<br />of the windAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-91989045324436170702011-02-06T12:08:42.914-05:002011-02-06T12:08:42.914-05:00Like the way you've taken some common combinat...Like the way you've taken some common combinations of words and given them a new context, esp. "..the temperature's been taken..." Great line, and great capture of the moody, distinct personality this picture projects.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-17710113294464735572011-02-06T11:48:25.006-05:002011-02-06T11:48:25.006-05:00My favourite lines- your blue moods filling the sp...My favourite lines- your blue moods filling the spaces<br />we inhabit once we've devoured<br />our fruits with passion. <br /><br />Terrific Maureen!Padmavani Karkerahttp://www.padmavani.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.com