tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post8391228965998140854..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Cave Story (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-26637157822204354602010-05-21T17:18:19.116-04:002010-05-21T17:18:19.116-04:00Thank you so much for writing and sharing this, Ma...Thank you so much for writing and sharing this, Maureen! There's so much going on in this story, such rich visual images, concrete and specific details, and the mystery of it all. You really take us there to each moment in time and make us feel it!Ami Mattisonhttp://www.poetrynprogress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-80725922593868668422010-05-21T13:18:21.360-04:002010-05-21T13:18:21.360-04:00This is a startling poem, a pastiche of imagery an...This is a startling poem, a pastiche of imagery and history, somewhat, to me, like a cave painting itself; visual woven with narrative and bits of history, summoning up a sense of the ancient; you convey how remarkable it is that these paintings exist/existed as well as our moral failure across time to value things and protect them when we can-- the works of art by nameless hands and the price we pay when we don't pay attention and sacrifice our own children.<br /><br />Somehow it makes me think of the striations over the Gulf of Mexico of the oil slick, an unwelcome visual feast for the eye in its own way, something with a life of its own that is claiming other life.<br /><br />One thing that strikes me about your work is that you put heart and soul into these epic statements, invoking the past and bringing up buried treasure-- you did this with your "monster" poem, informing each piece with the things that resonate for you. This takes relentless artistic commitment and the craft that I think is your hallmark-- bringing it all together, into a tapestry. It is a great thing when an artist working in other genres and dimensions brings this to bear in a poem. I would love for you to post it on SW in our group as well. All of us need to be reminded of what it means and takes to write something great. xjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-56090773364552332442010-05-20T21:56:55.991-04:002010-05-20T21:56:55.991-04:00This is so fascinating. Sometimes, when these myst...This is so fascinating. Sometimes, when these mysteries are discovered, it overwhelms me to imagine how they came to be. <br /><br />We must protect these places. Thank you for this story, Maureen. You are an excellent teacher....make me want to know more.Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08263995875732832349noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-48661198906449710892010-05-20T19:53:03.119-04:002010-05-20T19:53:03.119-04:00I love how we're all not crowd-followers so we...I love how we're all not crowd-followers so we all do the same thing and try for something original... ;-)<br /><br />Your poetry is all grown up. I feel as though mine is just dirt-play. *grin* It's on my face, isn't it, the dirt?<br /><br />This is really, really good writing, Maureen. And you made it educational too. I learned so much just reading the poem!Kelly Sauerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14138861838948184728noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-7100354699532399862010-05-20T15:22:08.420-04:002010-05-20T15:22:08.420-04:00it's always great to read a new poem from you....it's always great to read a new poem from you.sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03818420999930644450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-52620381223139526752010-05-20T14:44:32.785-04:002010-05-20T14:44:32.785-04:00I love these caves and that our ancient ancestors ...I love these caves and that our ancient ancestors made art there. Time and again, history makes me weep.Robin M Arnoldhttp://robinmarnold.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-34694653500007086102010-05-20T13:52:48.162-04:002010-05-20T13:52:48.162-04:00I loved the story here. And the end made me feel s...I loved the story here. And the end made me feel so sad...the cave is being ruined by time and exposure, and there is nothing to be done about it.<br /><br />Excellent detail: Robot!Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-21368125073089332762010-05-20T13:01:25.628-04:002010-05-20T13:01:25.628-04:00... the powerful unintended consequences of our ac...... the powerful unintended consequences of our actions ... if we could only see them ripple into the future, what would we do and what would we not do? Thanks for this powerful piece.Joyce Wycoffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03742084748092724299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-53215414137865653862010-05-20T11:24:51.022-04:002010-05-20T11:24:51.022-04:00"...don't it always seem to go, that ya d..."...don't it always seem to go, that ya don't know what you've got 'till it's gone?..."<br /><br />i agree with joni.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-4067126596332727522010-05-20T10:54:37.872-04:002010-05-20T10:54:37.872-04:00There is so much to ponder in this ... so much.There is so much to ponder in this ... so much.S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-42577142658983801652010-05-20T10:50:06.665-04:002010-05-20T10:50:06.665-04:00That last stanza.
Sighs.That last stanza.<br /><br />Sighs.L.L. Barkathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13333960142447144678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-59929339510374965382010-05-20T10:22:46.065-04:002010-05-20T10:22:46.065-04:00Older than recorded time, then vandalized by recor...Older than recorded time, then vandalized by recorded time. It's a beautiful poem, Maureen.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-28906120649024872472010-05-20T08:51:08.891-04:002010-05-20T08:51:08.891-04:00Interesting digs. Hadn't heard this story. I&#...Interesting digs. Hadn't heard this story. I'm glad you uncovered it for us. :)Kathleen Overbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12684519598333961438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-73339660909282847162010-05-20T08:41:00.728-04:002010-05-20T08:41:00.728-04:00"narrative we will never hear that yet made m..."narrative we will never hear that yet made memory"<br /><br />Not only a lesson in history, a lesson in humanity. <br /><br />Wow!Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-82343095305511814332010-05-20T08:02:56.824-04:002010-05-20T08:02:56.824-04:00You took me there, to the time the boys found the ...You took me there, to the time the boys found the cave, and back so much further again.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com