tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post932400481750920862..comments2024-02-03T14:41:13.330-05:00Comments on Writing Without Paper: Consider the Pomegranate (Poem)Maureenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-35365152132323906262011-03-04T15:06:16.835-05:002011-03-04T15:06:16.835-05:00I voted for you!I voted for you!Marcus Goodyearhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07255781957722144278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-61346713987129462002011-02-14T13:57:25.207-05:002011-02-14T13:57:25.207-05:00Great line breaks, intense use of imagery. Exempl...Great line breaks, intense use of imagery. Exemplary work.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-57548297605777763002011-02-12T18:04:36.815-05:002011-02-12T18:04:36.815-05:00And see how the last stanza sings! Great poem.And see how the last stanza sings! Great poem.kolembohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03367654070938475878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-85369602412606647992011-02-11T08:58:05.612-05:002011-02-11T08:58:05.612-05:00This speaks to me. Thank you for posting this...
...This speaks to me. Thank you for posting this...<br /><br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2011/02/ransom.html" rel="nofollow">ransom</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-86137871247252496332011-02-09T18:11:32.227-05:002011-02-09T18:11:32.227-05:00Whheeww..what vivid imagery, Maureen!
Yes, I like ...Whheeww..what vivid imagery, Maureen!<br />Yes, I like the metaphors here used to depict hope born from misery.. to depict light seen from a breach of trust... to depict the significance of proactive measures... I like it all!<br /><br />You have given us a glimpse at the goings on at Egypt, and with that, you have expressed your concern for the same... and the message is very effectively brought across here!! <br /><br />Very nicely written , my dear..Kavitahttp://kavisionz.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-53793461105652444132011-02-09T14:52:01.322-05:002011-02-09T14:52:01.322-05:00Once you bite into that sweet fruit within any acr...Once you bite into that sweet fruit within any acre of Hell, there's no going back. History is always trampling the mysteries -- Cairo I think has been stained with blood and pomegranate juice for as long as life-in-death has been an Egyptian metaphor, Pharaoh the god's stand-in, the despot with the authority of Heaven -- until someone in the street says No Way. Can the revolution survive its likely own death? Hope springs eternal like, well, Spring. If the protesters in Tahrir Square make it that long. The poem's sharp instruction to see what is there and Beyond in the same gaze is what only a poem can do -- at least, a poem of this magnitude. Take a bow.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-84749244783584744092011-02-09T14:50:02.218-05:002011-02-09T14:50:02.218-05:00One you bite into that sweet fruit within any acre...One you bite into that sweet fruit within any acre of Hell, there's no going back. History is always trampling the mysteries -- Cairo I think has been stained with blood and pomegranate juice for as long as life-in-death has been an Egyptian metaphor, Pharaoh the god's stand-in, the despot with the authority of Heaven -- until someone in the street says No Way. Can the revolution survive its likely own death? Hope springs eternal like, well, Spring. If the protesters in Tahrir Square make it that long. The poem's sharp instruction to see what is there and Beyond in the same gaze is what only a poem can do -- at least, a poem of this magnitude. Take a bow.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-4516679245319538662011-02-09T14:45:15.298-05:002011-02-09T14:45:15.298-05:00Very powerful, Maureen. Great juxtaposition of the...Very powerful, Maureen. Great juxtaposition of the real and ancient symbolism of this blooded fruit and the wounds of change in the world it grows in.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-61613381828121204972011-02-09T12:15:07.620-05:002011-02-09T12:15:07.620-05:00Pomegranites make for such great metaphores - as y...Pomegranites make for such great metaphores - as you've demonstrated so well here, Maureen!Bubbahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927345716112968689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-72796032970541289262011-02-09T11:29:04.506-05:002011-02-09T11:29:04.506-05:00Maureen, surely this is some of your most powerful...Maureen, surely this is some of your most powerful writing. I'm blown away with how you intertwine myth with current events--a truly brilliant gesture. <br /><br />These lines are amazing: "tri-colored flags making/ their own love poems, streaming as water in a garden/in Babel, wind on the bridge carrying hopes like confetti."<br /><br />I must say congratulations for achieving some truly fine writing.Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-76553275603612271882011-02-09T08:04:50.757-05:002011-02-09T08:04:50.757-05:00Oh, Maureen. The should and the now and the beauty...Oh, Maureen. The should and the now and the beauty that beats still. I love these glimpses into your heart and your passion for mankind. <br /><br />I am on "Remember" now. Words cannot express how I am enjoying your poetry. Neruda's Memoirs is so beautiful.Laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08263995875732832349noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-81740241608503255902011-02-09T06:34:13.645-05:002011-02-09T06:34:13.645-05:00Dear Maureen
'in arms begins with chanting sw...Dear Maureen<br /><br />'in arms begins with chanting sweet street songs.'... Liked this line very much...a great verse.. so vivid and creatively penned... thanks <br /><br /><br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br />http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.htmlShashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-73351249957002074312011-02-08T22:32:18.687-05:002011-02-08T22:32:18.687-05:00Wow.
I got carried away -- on the wind, like conf...Wow.<br /><br />I got carried away -- on the wind, like confetti carrying hopes.<br /><br />I got carried down -- like Persephone into Hades.<br /><br />and in the end, I came back up, breathing deeply of the rich dank smell of ripening fruit and freedom breaking the surface of waters rippling with a call for freedom.<br /><br />Powerful writing Maureen. Thank you for taking me with you. Absolutely stunning.Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-4998496204298575572011-02-08T21:07:46.125-05:002011-02-08T21:07:46.125-05:00I'm deeply grateful for these wonderful commen...I'm deeply grateful for these wonderful comments. Thank you.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-77179416130755561362011-02-08T20:38:54.648-05:002011-02-08T20:38:54.648-05:00Mystical, full of that desert cleanliness that is ...Mystical, full of that desert cleanliness that is sparse but beautiful in every atom. Glad you let this one steep, as it has yielded a heady and sustaining brew.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-15915024656999548492011-02-08T19:59:22.019-05:002011-02-08T19:59:22.019-05:00I'm always awed by your mastery of insinuation...I'm always awed by your mastery of insinuation by sound, imagery, and juxtaposition. You paint more than feelings, you touch more than all sensory information. I felt as I'd been there and experienced it. Excellent work, as always.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-41719565319523432042011-02-08T19:23:22.611-05:002011-02-08T19:23:22.611-05:00Gave me chills. And I sit hushed.
'Midst all ...Gave me chills. And I sit hushed.<br /><br />'Midst all I loved, this especially...<br /><br />"in Babel, wind on the bridge"L.L. Barkathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13333960142447144678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-70489033201786804032011-02-08T19:17:58.104-05:002011-02-08T19:17:58.104-05:00A painful wash in sweet juice of pomegranate and t...A painful wash in sweet juice of pomegranate and the residue of gun fire<br /><br />Excellently molded piecemoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-69656267053086000792011-02-08T18:25:44.945-05:002011-02-08T18:25:44.945-05:00This poem is special. It reverberates with emotion...This poem is special. It reverberates with emotion under the surface.Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-80671038834299745392011-02-08T18:02:05.871-05:002011-02-08T18:02:05.871-05:00wow these are all great but the third one is the o...wow these are all great but the third one is the one that caught me up...excellent...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-42655329259883625772011-02-08T17:19:40.195-05:002011-02-08T17:19:40.195-05:00wow - this was a tight write maureen ..wind on the...wow - this was a tight write maureen ..wind on the bridge carrying hopes like confetti.. fantastic imageryClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-33824897342644653492011-02-08T14:42:20.227-05:002011-02-08T14:42:20.227-05:00your words paint potent images ...your words paint potent images ...S. Etolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01847206680320012887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-11887844256103786162011-02-08T14:25:31.750-05:002011-02-08T14:25:31.750-05:00Regard the signs that bullets make
of dreams...Regard the signs that bullets make<br /> of dreams still falling in Cairo's streets,<br /><br />rejoined on a bridge of martyrs, relayed<br /> in Alexandria split seconds before white smoke<br /><br />succeeds the sound of metal against dry bone pierced,<br /> pieced, and quelled. What round of arms<br /><br />in arms begins with chanting sweet street songs...."-- gorgeous lyricism, assonance, consonance in these lines, Maureen-- and<br /><br />"See who cannot be counted, their numbers<br /> tolling with every step advanced<br /><br />before spinning turrets, their breaths, hoarsely formed, rising<br /> as hints of their morning selves, revealing code<br /><br />in a fluttering of hands, tri-colored flags making<br /> their own love poems, streaming as water in a garden..."<br /><br />in Babel, "as water in a garden in Babel"-- such resonance here-- invoking the tongues of the water and of Babel.... the gathering in and weaving of the mythic and contemporary is fabulous. Your indubitably hard work on this poem shows in spades. I love the line "mime not spring"-- oooo! I hope you'll permit me to use that line as a prompt/epigraph-- Brava! xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-69532350888901718412011-02-08T13:44:37.950-05:002011-02-08T13:44:37.950-05:00We recently saw the movie "Cairo Time," ...We recently saw the movie "Cairo Time," which was nothing about Egypt's current troubles, directly anyway. But it could have been, should have been.<br /><br />This poem is both an attempt to understand and an explication. And it is truly wonderful.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2639339699258439249.post-17009856815751244412011-02-08T13:27:12.936-05:002011-02-08T13:27:12.936-05:00What a marvelous poem, Maureen. With vivid imagery...What a marvelous poem, Maureen. With vivid imagery, mystery and secret flavors worthy of the pomegranate, one of the most beautiful fruits (and one of my favorite were it easier to eat!). From ancient myth to the bleeding present, what sweep!Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07522265816460154722noreply@blogger.com