Graphing Love's Course
Movement never lies.
You can chart it,
that graph of the heart.
Follow it, watch the line
rise and fall, so
zig-zaggy giddy
at the first kiss you
imagine needing
CPR and by the next,
longer still, you're wanting
to expose what's inside
to fully understand how
that muscle can take love,
like dope in a rolling vein,
just to maintain the high.
© 2012 Maureen E. Doallas
Tuesday, January 31, 2012
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19 comments:
So true! I really like this, Maureen.
Whoa! And wow! I'm zig-zaggy giddy from reading it.
and the purer the dope the more dangerous to those more used to having it cut with something lesser. As ever, fine stuff.
I love this from the first line to the last. I'll be back to read it again.
This is a favorite!
Wow is right.
Definitely a favourite for me too!
Great metaphor! And the last lines, 'like dope in a rolling vein,/ just to maintain the high.' are really ring true.
This is a lovely piece.
I like the idea of graphing and watching love's flowing and rolling high ~
sometimes those first kisses fly.. right off the chart...zing!
nice maureen...and once you take that hit, you just want more...and eventually it takes a little more...and a little more...
You nailed it - if I could cook it and shoot it, smoke it or swallow it, I'd do it to this poem. Bee-yoo-tee-ful!
Spot on. Ima gonna go kiss my wife and check my pulse...
Ah, that "graph of the heart"--poetry as heart-writing.
Love the movement of this, Maureen. I could see the graphing easily... right off the charts. =)
>that muscle can take love,
like dope in a rolling vein,
Those two lines are off the charts. :)
The concise couplets also echo the brief, jagged pulse of a heartbeat, and structure serves the theme. Great reading.
Love is the drug, as the song goes. And this poem has to be as succinct and universally applicable a view as I've read. i always enjoy your deft use of couplets, never more so than here.
Terrific. This hits right in the sweet spot that you know is "true" - the breaks almost like a missed heart beat and then you "reveal" and the beat accelerates up to the "wow,wow,wow" last three lines! Excellent.
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