Monday, May 9, 2011

You Want to Open a Conversation (Poem)

You Want to Open a Conversation

then: offer
sweets after sours, slip
yes from no,
pool sunlight
in your mouth, honey your tongue
so your words shimmer.

© 2011 Maureen E. Doallas

I offer this poem, in Shadorma form, for this week's "reviving dead metaphors" prompt at The High Calling. You'll find the inspiration for the prompt and the invitation to participate here. The deadline for contributions is May 11.


Louise Gallagher said...

Oh Maureen,

This is stunning. Beautiful.

I'm savouring every word on my tongue and in my mind. So few words to savour yet so rich! Yummy!

Kathleen said...

Lovely, Maureen.

Hannah Stephenson said...

This one reminds me of Jane Hirshfield...she has some beautiful poem about silence shimmering in the air between friends...I can't think of it now.

I love this one.

nance marie said...

pretty sweet shimmery...i like it.

S. Etole said...

licking the honey is so much better than swallowing the bitter ...

katdish said...

Wow. Another great one, Maureen.

Joyceann Wycoff said...

"honey your tongue
so your words shimmer"

what an incredible image and such great advice.

violet said...

Oh, I like this! Esp: "pool sunlight / in your mouth..." The whole things is a succinct and compelling apologetic for pleasing speech. (And I see you are becoming very eloquent in shadorma-speak!)

Simply Darlene said...

Your imagery is amazing! And these words are so tactile I feel them in my mouth.


L.L. Barkat said...

I think my favorite part is actually the title! :) Loved that.