To Tender Mourning
Of no vow
do lips seek promise;
from no name,
none's spoken
after; nor from eyes light coaxed
to tender mourning.
© 2011 Maureen E. Doallas
_______________________________I offer this poem, in the Shadorma form, for the One Shot Wednesday event at One Stop Poetry, which each week invites poets to share, read, and comment on each other's work. Visit the site late Tuesday afternoon and every Wednesday for the many contributors' poems.
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I read this aloud, and "mourning" became "morning." Beautiful.
The sadness in this poem is stunningly beautiful. And making sadness beautiful is hard!
Well done.
The title, the title iLike. So many styles Ive never heard of. You always stretch yourself.
bereft
This form makes for interesting pacing. I admire your conciseness--I find it harder to say more with less.
the truth of a silent mourning so well expressed Maureen...bkm
the beauty of a shadorma is what's left unsaid. Great choice of words Maureen, and a poignant and touching result.
a beautiful sadness...may morning come on your mourning...
I love the way you are elevating the Shadorma form each time you use it. It seems ideally suited to your style and you know I love it too. This was beautiful and heart breaking. I want to reach out to you with sympathy. Thank you so much, Gay
I love this form, Maureen, and you have crafted a beautiful poem within its structure and constraints.
A beautiful sadness....
Your writing always stretches me. I always read more than once. All the negative no, nor, none turn into a beautiful silent sadness...a toudhing of the heart of God.
there's a touch to this that reaches deep in my heart ...
you pack a lot into this short form. I kept reading 'mourning' as 'morning' .. the implication is interesting. Intended?
Nice piece Maureen
Quite a feel of the old troubadours to this, for some reason, maybe the simplicity combined with the universality, stated so well. A fine use of form, almost unseen which is hard with such a stringent one, but strongly felt.
This comes from an old soul of writing, I loved it ~ Rose
I Like it. will have to investigate this form further.
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