You Want to Open a Conversation
then: offer
sweets after sours, slip
yes from no,
pool sunlight
in your mouth, honey your tongue
so your words shimmer.
© 2011 Maureen E. Doallas
______________________________I offer this poem, in Shadorma form, for this week's "reviving dead metaphors" prompt at The High Calling. You'll find the inspiration for the prompt and the invitation to participate here. The deadline for contributions is May 11.
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10 comments:
Oh Maureen,
This is stunning. Beautiful.
I'm savouring every word on my tongue and in my mind. So few words to savour yet so rich! Yummy!
Lovely, Maureen.
This one reminds me of Jane Hirshfield...she has some beautiful poem about silence shimmering in the air between friends...I can't think of it now.
I love this one.
pretty sweet shimmery...i like it.
licking the honey is so much better than swallowing the bitter ...
Wow. Another great one, Maureen.
"honey your tongue
so your words shimmer"
what an incredible image and such great advice.
Oh, I like this! Esp: "pool sunlight / in your mouth..." The whole things is a succinct and compelling apologetic for pleasing speech. (And I see you are becoming very eloquent in shadorma-speak!)
Your imagery is amazing! And these words are so tactile I feel them in my mouth.
Blessings.
I think my favorite part is actually the title! :) Loved that.
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