Getting Our Words Out
We cross lines,
post words for the world
to see, fight
for cleared space
to share our bits and pieces
of both dark and light.
of both dark and light.
© 2011 Maureen E. Doallas
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This poem is inspired by Anna Lee Keefer's digital photograph "fallen on 21st street" at pixelatures (go here and scroll down to see the 11th image.)
Written in Shadorma form, the poem comprises six lines in 3-5-3-3-7-5 syllables, respectively.
Written in Shadorma form, the poem comprises six lines in 3-5-3-3-7-5 syllables, respectively.
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I offer this poem for the One Shot Wednesday event at One Stop Poetry, which each week invites poets to share, read, and comment on each other's work. Be sure to visit the site late Tuesday afternoon and every Wednesday for the many contributors' poems.
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22 comments:
You poem is so beautifully fitting for how I feel today.
Thank you!
that first line carries many meanings ...
Wow, this just about sums it all up Maureen! Short, brilliant write.
"to share our bits and pieces
of both dark and light."
yes. hoping someone will be there, perhaps, to pick up the pieces, or at least share the mess...
i love your poem.
The struggle to be heard is probably the second most important action a human partakes in. (The first being the struggle to survive.) Excellent description of this conflict. :D
Those pictures were just astonishing, so full of layers. Your shadorma is a meticulous reflection of the frayed and splayed images of words, barely legible, yet so important to someone that they once made them tangible, needed to put them up to be seen. Excellent form, and excellent writing. And thanks for the link.
Wonderful use of Shadorma form. You had me at the first "crossed" line. Prompted me to think of the remainder of the poem as art in many cases acting as a platform for opposing views, that while shared through a spectrum of light and dark, may not always agree in tone.
It's a cool photo - but I really like the poem.
Short and to the point. Nicely done.
short but perfect!
I'm not sure I'm in the fight. I just give them flight.
Your poem is beautiful in its brevity and true. Great poem for OSW!
How right you are!
Loved this. Thanks for sharing.
Even I, the antipoemest, enjoyed this poem. :)
The words "fight for cleared space" feel true. This digital world is cluttered and very wordy. Your poem alerts me to the need to fight for cleared space in my head - to attend to the bits and pieces that can enhance my life (like this little gem).
small words yet so powerful :)
Crossing lines through writing. Yes, very much so... An expressive Shadorma! :)
My One Shot Poem
What would light be without the dark?
Not too many words needed to say it like it is :) Loved it Maureen!
Cheers
Padmavani
Wonderful! Being so compressedly brief is hard for me, so I really admire your ability here. Clearing space on the page, in the waves of text of others and planting your letters. Awesome!
love the Shadorma form and you used it well here. words about words, excellent one shot.
This works for the visual artist, too. Seeking "cleared space, to share our bits and pieces of both dark and light". You speak for me.
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